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Question: Can you please help me edit this playbill bio!?
Uhm!. I need some help!. I'm supposed to be writing a bio for the playbill for our school play and I'm beat - so I kind of need some help!. I know this is ugh, but please bear with me!.

Anyhow, the details in this bio are altered (name, age, etc!.) to protect the identity of the person!. Thank you so much! Best revision gets the 10points! :)

An adrenaline junkie, Sharmaine Montgomerie is a 17-year old sophomore BS MGT student that could make your head spin when she's on her daily does of anything sugar!. A fanatic of anything fast, she enjoys go-kart racing, jetskiing and competitive swimming with a dash of ice skating during her more lethargic days!. Cars, chocolate, computers, cash and company are the five C's that make Sha happy!. Music also has a special place in her heart, for she loves to sing and play the guitar or drums during her spare time!.
Play Productions are nothing new to Sha, experiencing how to produce and direct a play since she was eleven in her Alma Mater's own Theatre Guild!. An accomplished orator and declaimer, she performs well on her own but confessed to be quite untested on the field of acting with a group!. Being always a supporting role, this is the first time Sha's going to play a major role in a play as Suriyothai, the heroine!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


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Sharmaine Montgomerie (Suriyothai) is a 17-year old sophomore BS MGT student that on her daily does of anything made of sugar, could make your head spin!. An adrenaline junkie, Sharmaine is a fanatic of anything fast, she enjoys go-kart racing, jet skiing and competitive swimming with a dash of ice skating during her more lethargic days!. Cars, chocolate, computers, cash and company are the five C's that make Sha happy!. Music also has a special place in her heart—she loves to sing and play the guitar or drums during her spare time!. Sha began producing and directing at the young age of eleven at her Alma Mater's own Theatre Guild!. An accomplished orator and declaimer, she is excited about the opportunity to test her skills working with a group performing the role of Suriyothai, the heroine!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

You have a good flair for comedy in this so I've left the tone intact just trimming some of the extraextraneouss!.

Sharmaine Montgomerie (Suriyothai) is a 17-year old sophomore, adrenaline junkie, BS MGT student could make your head spin when she's on her daily does of sugar!. A fanatic of speed, she enjoys go-kart racing, jetskjet skiing competitive swimming, or a dash of ice skating during her more lethargic days!. The five C's; Cars, chocolate, computers, cash, and company make Sha happy!. Music also holds a special place in her heart, she loves to sing, and play the guitar or drums during her spare time!.
Stage Productions are nothing new to Sha, she has produced and directed since the age of eleven for her Alma Mater's own Theatre Guild!.

This part is not needed and very confusing!. Are you more experienced as a main role or supporting character!? Not that it matter as the above info is quite enough!.
An accomplished orator and declaimer, she performs well on her own but confessed to be quite untested on the field of acting with a group!. Being always a supporting role, this is the first time Sha's going to play a major role in a play as , the heroine!.Www@QuestionHome@Com