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Question: Pleas read over my monologue!?
its about a seventeen yr old cheerldr who broke thier arm!. Omg i canot belive i fell off the top of the pyramid and broke my stupid arm and thoes jerks cant even catch someone they see falling i mean they just sat thier starring uhhhhh owowowow where are my painkillers huhuh maybei could take up law oh yeah rightt like ill ever get in there i guess ill have to go to school again man ill be like the 30 yr old highskooler maybe i could go to a community college but my dream is to become a famouse cheerldr i know ill go to lcc wait for my arm to heal and get my education then ill sign up for miami heat ohyeah ill be soo cool to bad i have to give up that college scholarship wait will i even be able to cheer after this omg i dint even think about that ill be like a handicapped person !.!. ill have to park in thoes spaces with the sign wait will i even be able to drive after this i guess i coud get a chauffer yeah i could have like servants and stuff but where will i get the money how will iWww@QuestionHome@Com
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hey well i might be using this for my presentation but idk cause i might sound wayyy shallow but i like fixed grammer and like all that and made it longer here is the version i am considering:
Oh my goodness!! I cannot believe I fell off the top of the pyramid and broke my stupid arm and those jerks can’t even catch someone they see falling! I mean they just sat their starring!. uhhhhh (hyperventilating) wowow! Where are my painkillers!?!!?! CHELSEA! HURRY UP!!! huhuh Maybe I could take up law!. Oh yeah right!. Like Ill ever get in there, my test scores look like a first grader did them…!.if only I sat next to that John guy, he ended up going to Harvard to study neurology, that doesn’t even sound that hard, I mean you can do anything if you put your mind to it right!?, but whatever!. I guess Ill have to go to school again!. Man Ill be like a 30 yr old high schooler and everyone would make fun of me… Maybe I could go to a community college!. I mean a lot of people go there don’t they!? But my dream is to become a famous cheerleader, I know! (light bulb thought!) Ill go to high school, wait for my arm to heal, and finish my education and then ill sign up to be a cheerleader for the Miami Suns, the like basketball team and I’ll cheer for like that really big basketball player named after a like a shack or something creepy like that!. Oh yeah ill be soo cool and earning soo much money!. I’ll be so good I’ll be turning turn all kinds of offers people are just DYING to give me!. Wait will I even be able to cheer after this!?!? Oh my gosh! I didn’t even think about that ill be like a handicapped person !.!. I’ll have to park in those spaces with the sign wait will I even be able to drive after this I guess I could get a chauffer yeah I could have like servants and stuff but how will I get into college!?!?!? huhu I used to be the star cheerleader now look at me!. I’m sitting here with a broken arm uhhh That squad is nothing without me!. hahaha they wont even reach the finals, will they!? well serves them right, laugh at someone with a broken arm and look oh my goodness I just broke a nail!! CHELSEA!! (chases after her)Www@QuestionHome@Com
This character is really hard to play without making her sound like, as another person so eloquently said, "As deep as a pie pan!." If there was some way to make the character sound more, I don't know, sincere and down to earth!? also, it really needs to flow more!. It seems really, um, spastic, jumping from one idea to the next without any real transition!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Whoa!.!.!. I'm sorry, but I wouldn't do this monologue if I was forced to!. I don't understand it, and it makes you sound about as deep as a pie pan!.
If you audition with this, you will be crossed off of anyone's list, before you even finish!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I really and truly hope this is a joke!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
The fact that its a cheerleader already sets it up to sound superficial!. It sounds like your trying to show some internal struggle, but you jump from subject to subject too quickly!. Focus on one thing and elaborate!. also, as a former cheerleader, I've never heard anyone say that their aspiration is to become a famous cheerleader!.
If a cheerleader broke their arm, they would be upset that they wouldn't be able to perform in competition!. They would worry about what their injury means for the team!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Ok!.!.!.!.
I don't know where to start!.!.!.!.
Kind of like your monologue!.
I doubt there's any way you can make this work unless everyone else in your class is just completely helpless in which case you might get a few laughs!. It's pointless!. It's really really hard to follow and it makes zero sense!. The only good thing I can say about it really, is that it would be VERY easy to memorize and act out!.!.!.there's just nothing there!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com