Is this a valid Dramatic Monologue?

Question:I posted this a week ago, but it has been edited now, and I am planning on using it to audition for an advanced theater class next month. I will be auditioning as an eigth grade student looking toward freshman year, so let me know if it is suitable or needs any work. Thank you!

All that you say makes sense. You are an intellect, I have never been. What I've learned, I've learned from listening to men talk, not from books. I never went to school long enough, but I'm not stupid, and you must listen to me, because you are in danger. You do not know your true nature. You wander through the night feeding on rats like a pauper and then moon at Babette's window. And suppose you could hold her in your arms, and she would look on you without horror or disgust- what then? A few short years to watch her suffer every prick of mortality, and then die before your eyes? Does this give happiness? This is insanity, Louis! This is vain. And what truly lies before you is a vampire’s nature, which is killing. For I guarantee you, that if you walk the streets tonight and strike down a woman as rich and beautiful as Babette, you will have no hunger left for her. You will be filled, Louis, as you were meant to be, with all the life that you can hold, and with that same sensibility that you cherish you will see death in all it's beauty. Life, as it is only known on the very point of death. Don't you understand? You alone, of all creatures, can see death that way- with impunity. You alone under the rising moon can strike like the hand of God. That is the way it is! (beat) I expected you to feel these things instinctually, as I did. And all this time I suppose I kept from straightening you out because you were best weaker. I'd watch you playing shadow in the night, staring at the falling rain, and I'd think, "He's easy to manage, he's simple", but you're weak, Louis. You're a mark. (beat) Come with me out into the streets, it's late. Let me show you what you are- really! Forgive me if I bungled it, left too much to nature, come! Evil is a point of view. We are immortal, and what we have before us are the rich feasts that conscience cannot appreciate, and mortal men cannot know without regret. God kills, and so shall we- indiscriminately, he takes the richest and the poorest, and so shall we.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: I posted this a week ago, but it has been edited now, and I am planning on using it to audition for an advanced theater class next month. I will be auditioning as an eigth grade student looking toward freshman year, so let me know if it is suitable or needs any work. Thank you!

All that you say makes sense. You are an intellect, I have never been. What I've learned, I've learned from listening to men talk, not from books. I never went to school long enough, but I'm not stupid, and you must listen to me, because you are in danger. You do not know your true nature. You wander through the night feeding on rats like a pauper and then moon at Babette's window. And suppose you could hold her in your arms, and she would look on you without horror or disgust- what then? A few short years to watch her suffer every prick of mortality, and then die before your eyes? Does this give happiness? This is insanity, Louis! This is vain. And what truly lies before you is a vampire’s nature, which is killing. For I guarantee you, that if you walk the streets tonight and strike down a woman as rich and beautiful as Babette, you will have no hunger left for her. You will be filled, Louis, as you were meant to be, with all the life that you can hold, and with that same sensibility that you cherish you will see death in all it's beauty. Life, as it is only known on the very point of death. Don't you understand? You alone, of all creatures, can see death that way- with impunity. You alone under the rising moon can strike like the hand of God. That is the way it is! (beat) I expected you to feel these things instinctually, as I did. And all this time I suppose I kept from straightening you out because you were best weaker. I'd watch you playing shadow in the night, staring at the falling rain, and I'd think, "He's easy to manage, he's simple", but you're weak, Louis. You're a mark. (beat) Come with me out into the streets, it's late. Let me show you what you are- really! Forgive me if I bungled it, left too much to nature, come! Evil is a point of view. We are immortal, and what we have before us are the rich feasts that conscience cannot appreciate, and mortal men cannot know without regret. God kills, and so shall we- indiscriminately, he takes the richest and the poorest, and so shall we.

Is it Long ? Riviting ?Understandable ? Its good.

Yeah. It is ok for a non-play monologue.

It's fantastic :)