Will You Remember Me???

Question:REMEMBER ME.

YOU'LL NEVER TOUCH MY SKIN AGAIN,
BESIDE YOU I WONT LYE.
BUT I'LL BE WITH YOU NOW AND THEN,
UNTIL THE DAY YOU DIE.
FUTURE LOVERS WON'T COMPARE,
TO WHAT YOU USE TO KNOW.
FROM TIME TO TIME YOU'LL STOP AND STARE,
BUT I WILL NEVER SHOW.
THAT EMPTINESS YOU TRY AND FILL,
THE ONE IN YOU I LEFT.
IS SOMETHING YOU WILL NEVER KILL,
I'M BETTER THAN THE REST.
YOU'LL NEVER THINK THAT I LOVED YOU,
CAUSE YOU DONT LOVE YOURSELF.
YOU ONLY THINK WHAT YOU KNOWS TRUE,
AND NEVER ASK FOR HELP.
FORGIVING YOU IS EASY
AND YET I FIND IT HARD,
WITH YOUR GREEN EYES OF JEALOUSY
A MUST TO BE IN CHARGE.
THE MARKS THAT YOU HAVE LEFT ON ME
WILL BE TAKEN TO MY GRAVE
YOU WILL ALWAYS HAVE MY MISERY
THAT’S THE ONE THING YOU CAN SAVE.

WRITTEN BY JAMIE ;)

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: REMEMBER ME.

YOU'LL NEVER TOUCH MY SKIN AGAIN,
BESIDE YOU I WONT LYE.
BUT I'LL BE WITH YOU NOW AND THEN,
UNTIL THE DAY YOU DIE.
FUTURE LOVERS WON'T COMPARE,
TO WHAT YOU USE TO KNOW.
FROM TIME TO TIME YOU'LL STOP AND STARE,
BUT I WILL NEVER SHOW.
THAT EMPTINESS YOU TRY AND FILL,
THE ONE IN YOU I LEFT.
IS SOMETHING YOU WILL NEVER KILL,
I'M BETTER THAN THE REST.
YOU'LL NEVER THINK THAT I LOVED YOU,
CAUSE YOU DONT LOVE YOURSELF.
YOU ONLY THINK WHAT YOU KNOWS TRUE,
AND NEVER ASK FOR HELP.
FORGIVING YOU IS EASY
AND YET I FIND IT HARD,
WITH YOUR GREEN EYES OF JEALOUSY
A MUST TO BE IN CHARGE.
THE MARKS THAT YOU HAVE LEFT ON ME
WILL BE TAKEN TO MY GRAVE
YOU WILL ALWAYS HAVE MY MISERY
THAT’S THE ONE THING YOU CAN SAVE.

WRITTEN BY JAMIE ;)

With all my respect this verse is bad, untalented, impious, unfair, stupid and is not noble at all.
Of course you'll probably think of me, in the moment when you see this review, that I am some sort of unfair, mean, evil minded man who wants to brand your work. Allow me say: That's not the matter!
The real matter is that if you really want to publish some poetry or any kind of work in front of the public you'll need to be very cruel to yourself, to have "bullshit detector" if you like, to be self aware and, indeed not in last place, to posses some real talent and wits. All this above mentioned CAN be improved by hard labor. So prepare your homework next time you want to publish some of your stuff.
I do not want to discourage you or anything like that but remember that near 90% of the work, even of the greatest men of art, is nothing but piece of horseshit. The reason why they're so great is that we never see that bad stuff and that they produce literaly tons of work amongst which grows the brilliancy of their genius.

And your question is?

thats beautiful. fantastic. and it especially paints a picture for me because its a feeling i can relate to, im sure as well as others. you are very talented. im not sure what your question is, but if you wanted my opinion, it was quite an attractive poem. thank you.