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Question: A Poem About Changing My Views About Valentine's Day!.!.!.Does it work!?
Love Will Come!.!.!.!.!.

Love has yet to find me here
To feel my warmth and dry my tears

Love has turned and left me blue
But Love, I have not given up on you

Someday love will see me here
Talk to me, take away my fear

Love will come for me they say
Maybe when blossoms bloom in May

Love will guide him here to me
His heart you see, belongs only to me

Love cannot come too soon
Consummated with our embrace under the light of the moonWww@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Straight from the heart! Well done!Www@QuestionHome@Com

It's not a bad start!. To me, it's the voice of a lonely person, afraid to take a chance, to go out and seek love, chained in a dark room by the stone known as "Some day my Prince will come!."

Don't know if I can brush it up, but let's see!.!.!.!.

Love Will Come!.!.!.!.!.

Love has yet to find me here,
To feel my warmth, to dry my tears!.

Love has passed my door again,
Leaving my mailbox filled with pain!.

But Love, I have hope for you -
Hope that you truly will come though!

Someday, Love, you'll see me here
You'll talk with me and hold me dear!.

You will guide him, Love, as all will see,
For his heart belongs to only me!.

Love, you cannot come too soon
To spark the lovers' embrace, the unlonely's swoon!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I think it`s a good poem!. I actually used to hate valentines day as well, cause i never had a boyfriend on valentines day but this year might be different!.
But when valentines day would come i started making myself think positive, and celebrated being single because we dont realize that we may not be single for long!. Were always too busy thinking when are we getting matched up!.
So buy yourself chocolate and buy your friends prsents if you want too, celebrite in your own way!Www@QuestionHome@Com

They say good things come to those who wait, and it seems to me as though you've waited long enough!. Always remember, you're a very good woman!. Anyone who doesn't think so is a complete moron!. I hope Love finds you soon, you're surely entitled to it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Wow i really like it!. especially the personification of love!. Its really tender and sweet and really applies to today i think cos everyone nowadays does try to rush into love waaaaay to fast!. =D well doneWww@QuestionHome@Com

WOW Mr!. Tater Salad said it best!.

let me just say WOW again!.
sounds like something i can compare
myself too so let me just ADD another WOW ~

Loved it and yes it does workWww@QuestionHome@Com

its good but I think the ending needs a bit of work

Love cannot come too soon
Consummated with our embrace under the light of the moon

I don't think it fits sorry but the rest two thumbs up:)Www@QuestionHome@Com

Beautiful as usual!. You are blessed with your use of words!. You are such a beautiful loving person I am sure your true love is not far and you will meet him soon!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Ah you have such a heart!. Love will surely find you soon!.
I love the poem!. Good luck to you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

That pic is my all time FAVORITE for Valentine's Day!
Good poem!.!.!.something I would definitely write!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

That was a very beautiful poem, i hope you find true Love one day, im lucky i have been married 27 years and am still in Love after all these years!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

yeahhhh i like it well done =)Www@QuestionHome@Com

very nice, but im not sure whether the last two verses go with the flow!.
maybe for the last verse another word for consummatedWww@QuestionHome@Com

Your rhymes seem rather stilted and pedestrian!. (edit to add) Stilted and pedestrian means rather unimaginative!. Sort of like the old Moon, June, Spoon rhymes!. EAch of the second lines is written to take advantage of the rhyme you chose, rather than working with the rhymes between the two lines!.

Some of the lines follow the pentameter pattern but others do not - especially the last line!.!.!.!.

YOu have a pattern of each stanza beginning with the Word "LOVE" but then leave it off one stanza completely!.

Not sure why you say it's a Valentines Day poem, when a particular day (not even Val!. Day) is not even mentioned!. It's mainly a love poem!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Nice, but the rhymes are kind of childish!. also I hate rhyming me with me!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Amazing!.!. Loved it alotWww@QuestionHome@Com

it shows you await love from someone and are jealous of others who can celebrate valentines!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It's very pretty, it seems that you don't give up, that's very good!. Keep writing!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

ugh, seems like a pattern this time of year, nothing's changed!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It is a very good poem!. Bravo to you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

i thought it was both deep and yet light - kinda life something we all have felt and will feel!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It's good!. I really like it!. I hope you find your love! But with love or not I still hate Valentines day too ;)Www@QuestionHome@Com

Love it, wow! You have a great talent my friend!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Very good! =]Www@QuestionHome@Com

EMO! are you 14!? and do you wear black all the time!? and the last line sucksWww@QuestionHome@Com

Its just rocking!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Love it :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

I reaally enjoyed marvinat!.!.!.'s answer,he made me laugh!.!.!.write another one!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

there's always time!.!.!.!.!.

!.!.!.!.for valentine!.!.!.!.!.

!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.till the heart stops!.!.!.!.


I thought the poem was lovely!.

I see the Marvinator's point somewhat, but poetry -- while inspired by those things without -- comes from within, and our first efforts in getting a new work from inspiration to pen to paper, may not be the finished, polished, thing we'd want it to be!.

My suggestion would be to rearrange the line, so that each begins with 'love', to: Love will someday see me here!. As for the final line, I am drawing a blank at the moment!.

But I like your response to the Marvinator's comments!. and I really do like your poem very much!.

Hope I helped!.
God bless you!.
? ?Www@QuestionHome@Com