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Question: Is this poem enough, or should I have said more!?
my hands scale the moist, rough walls,
their touch, the only guide I have along
so narrow a pathway here in this
still, black cavern where I am lost
alone
and afraid
even of what my hand may touch
let alone where my feet may step
is it safer to simply close my eyes
rather than strain them to find the light!?Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I like the first alone!. Mysterious
close your eyesWww@QuestionHome@Com

I'd say (humbly) that you should either leave it out or put it between:
alone
and
and afraid

So:
my hands scale the moist, rough walls,
their touch, the only guide I have along
so narrow a pathway here in this
still, black cavern where I am lost
alone
too dark to see
there's nothing to smell or taste
and the only sound I hear echoing
is the beat of my own fearful heart
confirming my existence
so I reach ahead to
touch the unknown, it keeps me
from being rendered
senseless!.
afraid
even of what my hand may touch
let alone where my feet may step
is it safer to simply close my eyes
rather than strain them to find the light!?

EDIT: Just looking at the shape that makes!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I think just having the single verse is better, but that is my personal opinion!. My approach is the more minimalistic approach!. I find that sometimes you can lose the overall effect of the piece if you try and carry on!.

Sometimes less is more, as the saying goes!.

Hope all is well!. xWww@QuestionHome@Com

I like this as is!.!.!.leaves much to ponder this way!.

I picture myself in this, running my hand along the wall!.!.!.!.

Truly beautiful to see in my minds eye, though scary as well!. Deep thoughts come to me and I ponder is this a life lesson mixed in somewhere!?!Www@QuestionHome@Com

i'm not sure but!.!.!.!.!.!.

!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.something tells me that!.!.!.

!.!.!.something is missing!.!.!.!.!.!.

perhaps a set of 2 lines to bridge the first and the second stanza!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

I too think the first verse stands alone, and is more powerful without
the second verse, If I was going to use the second verse, I'd drop the
first two lines!. But it is after all your poem, your feelings!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I think this poem is more than enough, it establishes the atmosphere and the ending leaves it to all kinds of interpretation making it a lot more enjoyabel for any reader
excellent work :)

Edit:

I feel like the stanza you added is brilliant because it adds to the atmosphere of the poem but for me, the question is whether its necessary or not, after i was finished i thought oh yes definitely but when i look back at it i feel like your sort of re-stating what's already been implied in the first stanza!.!.but if you were to add the second stanza!.!.
too dark to see << i dont think this line would be necessary since we already know that therez very or no light
there's nothing to smell or taste
and the only sound I hear echoing
is the beat of my own fearful heart
confirming my existence << i think this is where you should stop!. The lines below, i feel, are some of the lines which seem to be restating what you've already said in the first stanza where you're going somewhere unknown and doing this step-by-step thing!.!.!.so personally, i would slash them
so I reach ahead to
touch the unknown, it keeps me
from being rendered
senseless!.

those were just some suggestions and just my opinion so obviously you can completely disregard it all
hope i helped :)

& well done :DWww@QuestionHome@Com

Your eyes will grow accustomed, after awhile and when you do, you will truely see what the light brings!. Be not afraid of what you do not knowWww@QuestionHome@Com

I like the first verse standing alone!. It is a powerful read!.!.!.and seemed to lose some of the punch in the second stanza!. My humble opinion!. Very good write Ma!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I think the first verse is enough, and actually think the initial poem is better without the second verse!.!.!.though either can stand on its own, I think the first one is stronger!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like the first standing alone!.!.!.and!.!.!.I really like the second standing alone!
what a feeling you have transmitted, and a good metaphor!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Wow! Again, like you read my mind!. I can find no light right now so I just close my eyes and move when I must!.

Excellent write, Ma!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Without seems to be a bit of a repeat and does nothing to further the readers knowledge!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

No and to me its best sometimes to close your eyes!.Good poem Ma!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Close your eyes in the dark, you WILL see better!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I think you have said it all with the last two lines
of the fist stanza!.
Another good read,
Thank you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Most wanted man
in the state of Georgia!.!.!.
They're never gonna find me
cause I'm lost !.!.!.
in Miller's cave

edit:
Use bothWww@QuestionHome@Com