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Can you rate my poetry!?
More than a poetry is my good bye letter for my dead daughter I hope you all are sincere!.
I always want to ask you a question my love: Why!? Why you leaved without saying good bye!. I have to confess to you that the day you died, I died with you too!. In my desperate way to bring you back I used to scream your name so hard and spent all day long down on the floor!. I can not describe to you the pain inside my chest!. Is good for you not to be here and see me in this way!. Your sister told me the other day:Mom you looks like a ghost You do not sing anymore and you do not dance anymore like before, can you be the same again please!? I still alive! Is for this reason that I have to say good bye to you my dear one!. I will always loving you the rest of my life and I promise you after the last bit of my broken heart I will be with you but now I have to be with but now the alive ones needs me !. Bye my love, my little one!
Thanks to read this and help to heal my wounds!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
It is a very sweet and endearing letter and the words do not matter the emotion is there, raw and real truly heartfelt,
I am so sorry for your loss, and I do understand that you have another daughter that needs the mother you once were, and saying goodbye now could give the deep wounds a chance to heal, although your daughter is no longer with you on earth she will remain with you always and she would want you to enjoy your life and treasure what you do have, Love and may God bless!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I know nothing about poetry!. However, my sister randomly wanted to answer this question so here you go!. The poem is to depressing!. It is also sounds to much like a story!. Me myself have to agree that it is pretty lengthy, and I have to admit that I didn't take the time to read it!. Hope my sister wasn't to cruel!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I would call this more prose, if you want to use a poetic form it needs more structure!. You express your emotions well, and it is clearly heartfelt!. Concentrate on punctuation and full sentences and this will be really nice!. I'm sorry for your loss!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Heart-rending!.!.!. This brought tears to my eyes!. God bless you, Simone!. It's good that you have faith that you will see her again!. In the meantime, things will get better - time really does heal!. Thank you for sharing this!. You're not alone - there's a lot of grief out there!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Well, it sounds good if you are going to say it at a funeral!. But I would prefer not to say it to a lover or a person that is still alive!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
it is very sad!. I have never had a trauma as bad as this but I hope for the sake of you and your other daughter you get over it!.
Very good but would make people cry!.
that was awful and i know a lot of people that are famous that would tell you the same sorry but that was horribleWww@QuestionHome@Com
the poetry is not the greatest but the meaning behind it is so touching
im so sorry thats so sad
that is so deepWww@QuestionHome@Com
it needs to be in teh form a a poem, its kinda just a jumbled paragraph otherwiseWww@QuestionHome@Com
10 out of 10Www@QuestionHome@Com
Is rather spliffingWww@QuestionHome@Com
That poetry is cute i love itWww@QuestionHome@Com
out of 10 i owuld give it a 8, but i come from a family of very good poets so that is a great complimentWww@QuestionHome@Com
7 out of 10Www@QuestionHome@Com
not very good , more bad than good, well more like awfulWww@QuestionHome@Com
thats hella good no joke keep at it :PWww@QuestionHome@Com
Um its pretty good but at some parts i don't really get what you mean!.
you have talent keep writing!.!.! (:Www@QuestionHome@Com
That is a wonderful poetry!! Great Job hun! And ill pray for your daughter!. I love that poam!! it touched my heart!Www@QuestionHome@Com
I have faced the possibility of loosing my son a number of times!. I can't imagine how you feel!.
Poem is great!. I fixed a few grammar errors!.
I always want to ask you a question my love: Why!? Why did you leave without saying good bye!. I have to confess to you that the day you died, I died with you too!. In my desperate way to bring you back, I used to scream your name so hard and spent all day long down on the floor!. I can not describe to you the pain inside my chest!. It's good for you not to be here and see me in this way!. Your sister told me the other day: Mom you look like a ghost!. You do not sing anymore and you do not dance anymore like before; can you be the same again, please!? I'm still alive! It is for this reason that I have to say good bye to you my dear one!. I will always love you for the rest of my life!. I promise you after the last bit of my broken heart, I will be with you, but now, I have to be with the alive ones who need me !. Bye my love, my little one!
Brings tears to my eyes!. Wonderful poem, my heart goes out to you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
oh my goodness, that's so beautiful and sad :( I think its lovely!.
I'm so sorry for your loss, making the most of our short time on this planet with the people we still have is so important, your other daughter who died is still with you, she will never leave you, she wouldn't want you to be sad, she wouldn't want it for her sister either!. I'm sure as she looks down on the people she loves and see's them happy she will be smiling and content!.
This has touched me so much, I wish you and your family well xxxxWww@QuestionHome@Com
other than the spelling mistakes I found it to be beautiful!. I believe it to not only capture your physical stress and emotions perfectly, but also shows your drive to live and continue to push forward for your other child's sake quite nicely!. I understand a mother's loss is arguably the hardest thing a person can can handle!.!.!.I am truly sorry!. Keep going though, you are appreciated as your other daughter has clearly shown you and she needs you to be strong, goodbye and good luckWww@QuestionHome@Com