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What do you think of this poem,and is the tittle appropriate please leave your comments!?
What do you think of my poem, please leave your comments!.!?
When i look up in the sky,
i see a bird which is flying very high,
unbound, carefree and very proud,
sky is her playground!.
i wish i was that bird,
as usual my pleas were unheard!.
lost in my thoughts, something fell over me
my new friend had sent her greetings, a gift
as i looked at my clothes, i realized
it was her disgusting s h i t!.
Tittle- I GUESS "S H I T HAPPENS"!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I love it!. With the title, it's no way inappropriate!. The title actually flows with the poem!. *laughs* and a "high five" at that!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
A masterpiece!. It is reminiscent of the seminal work, which I quote:
In the sky
Why you do that
In my eye!?Www@QuestionHome@Com
it wasnt bad, but the harsh word at the end kinda ruins it!. Its too crude for poetry, but I like the message your trying to expressWww@QuestionHome@Com
This one danced and then hit with a bang!
Like the title! I like it as it is, a life lesson buried deep within--or am I over thinking things again!?! gigglesWww@QuestionHome@Com
well this poem was diffinatly S H I T sry but yea that sucked majorly and i agree that last word to harsh for a poem nice try though i think oyu should go back to what you know]Www@QuestionHome@Com
i actually really liked it sunny, great work !!!!
and i think that the title works really well :)Www@QuestionHome@Com
It was s h i t!.!. you asked!.!. i toldWww@QuestionHome@Com