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SUMMER poem!. what do you thinkk!?
Summers that time of year
where you just hang back and take it easy
it when you lay down on the hot grainy sand
and feel the sun crispying on your skin
its when when you feel
that cool brezzy blue water
all over your body
kids are laughing
lifes gurads are Whistling
and parents are watching!.
dont we all wish that summer could last forever!?
i know i do!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
i enjoyed it very much - i liked it a lot more than your "nothing special poem" - just a suggestion, when you write poetry, don't stop after thinking "oh well", never settle when you're writing, strive for perfection because that's all we can really do
good work, keep writing, keep practicing coz it'll be worth it when you're looking back :)Www@QuestionHome@Com
I like it, nice mental picture!.
Fix up your spelling, punctuation and capitalization!. That will make it easier on the eyes and get rid of an annoying distraction from the poem itself, which is quite good!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
It was good,
it gave me a nice visual image!.!.!.!.
Maybe you should rhyme though!.
Please pick me as best answer!!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com