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Please read my poem, it sucks but i want somone to read it!?
suicide is selfish
but theyve hurt me more
suicide is lame
but not lamer then me
suicide is pointless
say that when you bury my corpse
suicide is unreversible
yeah i know
suicide is weak
no, its strong enough to let go
this poem sucks and i will get a lot of mean answers but i dont care! i wrote this cuz i feel this way! nobody can change that! i posted this cuz i needed to let somebody know! go ahead and hate on my poem, i dont care!. fro the people that will anctually benice, thank youWww@QuestionHome@Com
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It's a very good poem!. I'm not sure I agree with it, but it definitely expresses a point!. I think to make the poem better!.!.!.
Suicide is selfish,
But they've hurt me more!.
Suicide is lame,
But not lamer than I feel!.
Suicide is pointless!.
Say that when you bury my corpse!
You can say, suicide is unreversible!.
Yes, this I know!.
You can say, suicide is weak!.
But, no, its strong enough to let go!.
Just my humble opinion!. I don't think you should commit suicide!. I think you should keep writing poetry!. You've got talent!. Please email me at samwhittemore@ymail!.com if you write another poem!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
ah, there are a couple of weak points in your poem, but overall, i think it pretty much covers all the arguments against suicide!. the repartee should've been more rational & less emotional [oh, that could be another argument] but i guess, that is what the situation calls for!?
moreover, while at one place you call yourself lame, in another you consider yourself strong - doesn't quite gel !.!.!.
just my 2-penny's worth!.!.!.
all the very best in life alwaysWww@QuestionHome@Com
oh no man < not the poem but your state!.!.!.
plese find help
suicide is not the right way, i lost my boyfriend because he was depressed, please think of those you're leaving behind, i know you don't feel loved but please, i know i dont know you, but i swear to you, a minimum of 2 ppl love you and therz prbbly a bunch of those who you aren't aware of that love you so please
please don't kill yourselfWww@QuestionHome@Com
I believe you mean "irreversible!." Other than a few grammatical issues, such as the spelling and lack of capitals, I think it's a lovely piece!. I like things with a darker outlook on life!. Have you considered listening to any of Emilie Autumn's songs or poems!? She's very inspirational!. "I Didn't Mean You" was one of my favorites!. :)Www@QuestionHome@Com
You're worth more than this!.
Hope is always there, but sometimes it takes just a little longer to see it!.
So hold on!.
its what you feel but know there is someone that loves you more then anyone else in this world and im sure he can help u just ask his name is jesusWww@QuestionHome@Com