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Is it possible to write a good poem when you have been working all day!?
(I don't think so)!.
The Descent of Poetry
by Elaine Polin
The hours before sunrise heavy, lie on my heart,
Night, former companion, is reluctant to part!.
Bright Luna is absent, no breeze stirs dead air,
Ocean’s tides lie at ebb, stars and planets elsewhere!.
In these strange, silent hours, time seems to stand still,
And clichés spew their horrors, an eternity to fill!.
Poetry should be written when neurons are firing,
So tonight, I give up, my pen I’m retiring!Www@QuestionHome@Com
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I like it, i've wrote tons of peoms while tired!. Some of my best come when I'm laying in bed!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Interesting with a flavor of black comedy!. Some quite good lines there, particularly the first couplet!. I guess you can handle poetry even when your neurons are not firing, by constructing a poem (mentally) ending up with a logical decision!. My guess is that you know a lot about poetry!.
Interesting read!. Thanks for sharing!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
i really enjoyed reading it
but i think tht the last line may need a bit of a rewrite!?
So tonight i give up, I give up my pen
And hear me go, i'm retiring!
I just feel like the coma makes the sentence a lil awkard u knw!? but obviously its just an opinion :)Www@QuestionHome@Com
Early morning is usually my time, but ideas seem to spring out at anytime!. The key is knowing when to not try to push words!. Should it be 'night, my companion' or 'night my former companion'!?Www@QuestionHome@Com
I love the words (clichés spew their horrors, an eternity to fill), but not so much the rhyming!. It might actually sound better without it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Good rhyme scheme!.!.!. I think you're trying too hard to rhyme than to express your emotions!.!.!.!. and there are too many commas, making it seem like sentences rather than linesWww@QuestionHome@Com
I liked it alot!. it rhymes very good!.Www@QuestionHome@Com