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What do think of this poem!?
i'm not a poet and the poem is about the bad things about me lol
"i'm fat i take up space
i eat so much, that you cannot replace
i'm kind of tall
'do you play basketball!?'
no, i figure skate
i'm quiet and i talk to some in the crowed
yes, i'm a loner but i'm not proud!."
i told you i wasn't professional lol, and it just came to me!. btw it's called "The Loner" by me ^_^Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
actually i like it, its simple, interesting, i dont think the rhyming or the rhythem is off!.!.!.but u seem to contradict yourself when saying you figure skate, or is that just wit ;)
either way, quite good :D
and btw, to the comments above me, some loners are very proud of being loners because it makes them feel like they are very independent, please keep an open mind when reading this and don't just toss it away, but think about it a lil!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
poetry is clearly not your proffession
and "i'm a loner but i'm not proud!." doesnt make any sense, because being a "loner" isnt good, and you're not contradicting yourself, so theres no need for "but", it should be "i'm a loner and i'm not proud!."Www@QuestionHome@Com
Well you have some low self esteem!.
The rhymes are just there!.
And the rhythm is messed up!.Www@QuestionHome@Com