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Question: What's your opinion on this poem I wrote!?
-Eternal Darkness

She's stepping out of the light!.
Walking into the night!.
She doesn't seem to understand, this is her final hour!.
The darkness she's following is controled by such power!.
The eternal darkness is drawing her in!.
She keeps taking each step, again and again!.
She hears a scream but doesn't understand!.
This dark path is taking her to a land!.
A land with all of her nightmares to stalk her!.
A land in which many pains she'll feel and she must endure!.
She starts to cry, maybe she gets it now!.
But she's already in deep, there is no way out!.
That girl that's living her nightmare!.
The girl that everyday lives a scare!.
That girl is I!.
I'm the one who will always have to cry!.

Not one of my best I think!.
But I suppose I should see what you all think of it :]!.

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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
i think is a very good poem you wrote and why did you say its not your best i think this is the bestest poem i ever read you almost scared me good job i hope you write more like this one i love to read so will the others!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

"The girl that everyday lives a scare"!? That needs to go!.

I think that what you're doing here is useful, because you're getting some of your emotions out in a way that you can see them and deal with them, but as poetry it's got some fairly major flaws!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I think it is amazing!. I can visualize everything you mentioned, and I could feel it too!. It was something I could realte to!. I thought it was terrific and trust me it is one of your best!. Its AWESOME!Www@QuestionHome@Com