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Question: Hey what do you think of this poem!? Feed back please!.!?
You cannot swim in my water
If you insist on flailing,
Your ignorance upsets
The mellow pool in which I rest,
You may not kill in my water,
The souls of the un-lead
Simply because they are worth
More to you dead,
You may not steal from my waters
Knowledge that you will warp
To fit the oddly shaped
Corners of your sheltered mind,
You may not walk on my water,
With your faux sacred tales
It will not serve as witness
To your “holy” betrails!.
This lake that I swim in,
It Is made of my soul ,
It is NOT one more thing
For your lies to control,
As you are just part
Of what should be your whole,
I bid you go on
With whats left of you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
i love your poem
to fit the oddly shaped corners of your sheltered mind
:)
awesomeWww@QuestionHome@Com

good job i like it, it examples how you are feelingWww@QuestionHome@Com