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Question: Constructive criticism for my emo poem please!?
Dawn creeps up around the mossy green hills
Like a bright orange tiger with sharp claws
Day slinks up beautiful, and yet it kills
Swallowing its midnight prey by its maw!.
I stand and watch the tiger, bright red, rise
Yawning, stretching, flexing its huge talons
With a sun that resides in its star-lit eyes!.
I see it, I smell it, the moss smell of villains-
And then it is gone, hid by the glum clouds!.
A flash, a flicker, flutter of an eye
A boom, no room for thunder clapping loud!.
I look up in awe at the tears of the sky
No nightmares, no fears, a good way to die-
To be swallowed by the might of the skies!.

Please critique! But if you say it's bad, please be prepared to tell me why so I can improve!. Thanks!:)Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
its beautiful!. I wouldn't call it emo, because emo actually stands for emotive which is defined as expression through music but it is quite eloquent and it is rich with personification and similes!. it has a clear theme and doesn't drag on as well as it gets the readers attention!. GOOD JOB!Www@QuestionHome@Com

its really good, although i dont really think its emo!. but i think you should keep writing poems if you want to!. your good!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

its awesome but yeah i wouldn't call it emo eitherWww@QuestionHome@Com