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Question: Do you like my poem (please read)!?
any suggestions!?
alone
I watch the rain fall out my window
The thunder claps and the wind moans
Staring out the pane, I realize
I am alone!.
I walk the busy streets
Cars honk, people talk on their phones
Dogs howl at flying pigeons
I am alone!.
I hear them fight outside my door
The sounds they make I try to drone
Screaming and yelling, won’t they stop!?
I am alone!.
My friends laugh and giggle
They speak in a cheerful tone
I wonder what is so amusing
I am alone!.
I lie on my bed in solitude
And I hear myself let out a groan
Because no matter who I am with
I am always alone!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Ah, you write well!. I take it this, since it has much emotion, is based on experience!? I like the alternate rhymes!. Well structured stanzas too!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Take out the lines that say "I'm alone"!.
Personally it makes it way too up front and leaves out any scope that the reader might have into the poem!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
its very good!.!.!.sad but good
but you always say with or realize then I am alone on the first and last staza!.!.!.maybe you can put because i am alone!.!.!.idk
its good the way it is but i would either change it or take out i am aloneWww@QuestionHome@Com
Nice!.Www@QuestionHome@Com