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this is a re post!. this poem is a bit abstract but if anyone can interpret it i would appreciate it!. it is my work but i would like to know what people's impressions are when they read it!. 10 points to the best analysis!.

Forgotten soldiers


Cupid

Draw your arrows

And aim at our cold, bitter hearts

Let their golden heads pierce

The thick layer of confusion inside us

Let it dissolve in lonely places

We long to feel compassion

We long to experience love

Anything is better than

The swampy wasteland we inhabit

Gentle warrior

Work stealthily in the cool night

Bring along with you Eirene

Let her whisper the magical words

And change winter to spring

Let peace rain on us

We sit hoping to see bright horizons ahead

Will you forget us too!?

We sit in the hollows beneath

The vast emptiness

We sit waiting to be remembered

Must we live in oblivion!?

Or will someone hear our cries!?

Save us!

Waiting here is longer than perpetuity

Please save us from the nothingness we've become

We desperately wait

For our redemption dayWww@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
It is very nice!.!.!. Though some of the words you have used are not so appropriate!.!.!. Edit here and there and it will be great!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Love it until gentle warrior, then it gets sketchy, but from let peace rain on us and on i like it againWww@QuestionHome@Com