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Position:Home>Poetry> I edited this Luc Bat a bit, I attempted to wrap around..will you read this poemQuestion: I edited this Luc Bat a bit, I attempted to wrap around!.!.will you read this poem, and comment Constructively !? An olive branch, I wave at you
attempting face to save!. A simple act, I gave it style Accompanied with smile; I asked, “please sit a while, with me,” before you turn and flee!. Within this century we live My loyalties I give!. Your haughty look sends shivers, though as right past me, you blow!. I said “please, do not go off mad; Just sit with me a tad…!. Thinking, ‘we never had dinner, I’m becoming thinner, by the moment, please sir… if you would look, you’d see it’s trueWww@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: you've followed the form!. The content is a delight!. I can't see anything to add to make it better!. Brilliant, reallyWww@QuestionHome@Com Dear Minstrel, I find this form (not your poem) hard to understand, and am researching it and read your poem again, and make suggestions if warranted!. Meanwhile, I leave you one from the page where I am trying to learn it!. A Luc Bat Poem A luc bat poem is such You need not say so much at all Simple words can enthrall It can be simple and small or big An epic thingamajig Alter words make them fig or fit The poetic license bit Just like that line of **** or **** Whatever, give it a bash Now my mind I must thrash and beat And turn these humble feet So first and last line meet and touch -- The Biki I find this form hard to understand!. Yet I am researching it and read your poem again, and make suggestions if warranted!.Www@QuestionHome@Com My only comment is that it is a wonderful write! I wouldn't change a thing!Www@QuestionHome@Com how can i critique anything that starts with waving a olive branch!.!.!.peace!.!.!.great poemWww@QuestionHome@Com yes!.!.!.!.!.!. it's true!.!.!.!. !.!.!.!.i see it in your piece!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com |