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Question: What comes to mind when you read this!?
as the wolf finds her way out of the woods there is a cry far off!. as if to say this world is not one of my dreams were am I!. the wolf howls back as if to say this is
the only world so make it the best you can!. she starts to run to the sound like the one who cry-ed was alone and hurts so!.the way to this sound is long and feel like
she has been running for days with out sleep!. the sound makes she feel like there is someone out there that feel the same way as the jade wolf!. fear of being alone
make her run looking for someone but fear they will not know the same pain she feels this jade wolf pushes them away!. this jade wolf now finds one just like her and
now feels the hurt of someone who does not want to be found and need to feel safe by them self!. now she only feels the need to find the one who has the same pain as her!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


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<<<< is your biggest fan!.
I am lonely but you just being there brings me comfort and even somehow eases the pain!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I can almost feel the message but using the wolf does not deliver it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

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porn but thats meWww@QuestionHome@Com

mmm, the grammar is slightly awkward and there are some spelling errors (maybe deliberate!?) like cry-ed (cried), but i do like the imagery!. I think what you need to do is break the piece down so that it is not presented in a single paragraph, but instead is presented in a more linear format!. As so!.!.!.

As the wolf finds her way out of the woods there is a cry far off, as if to say this world is not one of my dreams were I am!.

The wolf howls back as if to say this is the only world, so make it the best you can!.

She runs to the sound like the one who has cried and was alone, hurting so!.

The way to this sound is long and it feels like she has been running for days without sleep, the sound makes her feel like there is someone out there that feels the same way as the jade wolf!.

Fear of being alone makes her run looking for someone, but she fears they will not know the same pain she has felt!.

This jade wolf pushes them away, but then this jade wolf finds one just like her and now feels the hurt of someone who does not want to be found and the need to feel safe by them-self!.

Now she only feels the need to find the one who has the same pain as her!.

I have made some minor changes, mostly grammar, and as you can see by breaking into into verses the piece becomes easier to read and has a better rhythm and flow!.Www@QuestionHome@Com