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Question: Posted this earlier!. Need some suggestions!. Its for class!.!.!.!?
There must be fire blazing underneath the dancefloor
the way we move our feet, is like they're roasting over flame
No ones watching, no dicerning eye to dance for
Though our foxtrot would put them all to shame

The truth is that were just two wayward souls
thrown together by a warm and chunky twist of fate
written by the stars in half digested casserole
a romance that came fifty years too late

This ritual of ours is nothing serious,
I love it when we have a little lunch room rendevouz
and dont stop dancing until we are delerious
Lovely linda the lunch lady, I love you

You'd think there was a blizzard blowing our way
judging by the way we hold eachother oh so close
I cling so tight because I like to feel your heart beat
Because that's where all of my devotion goes

I know to them i'm just steve the custodian
but to you I am the man who will gladly take your pain
No one else could ever love you the way I can
with feelings hotter than a wildfire that burns across a plain

Use your spatula to turn over a new leaf
And I will use my mop and sponge to whipe away your tears
and well keep dancing and dancing 'till our joints give out
but at our age that could be in a few yearsWww@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Ok, you have some punctuation issues and spelling errors that need to be fixed; you also have uneven pentameter in your verses!. Take each line and give each syllable one beat!. Each two lines need to be approx!. the same number of beats!.

For example your last verse that starts "Use your spatula!.!.!.!. That line has 12 beats and the next line has 14, you may want to add the word "brand" in the first line as in "brand new leaf" to make the beats closer and change "I will" to "I'll" to reduce a beat in the second line!.

I like it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com