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Question: Having trouble with an ending--Should I go blood guts and gore or happy ending!? Partenza Represa # 2!?
Carnage everywhere, heart exposed
Heart exposed, black and blue body
Black and blue body, pain raked soul
Pain raked soul, crawl on hands and knees!.
Make up artistry, long sleeve blouse
Long sleeve blouse, skirt down to the floor
Skirt down to the floor, hides bruising
Hides bruising, not pain in eyes!.
Smile on face, no one will find out
No one will find out, bloodless crime
Bloodless crime, but crime JUST the same
But crime just the same, police phftttt!
I can't decide on the ending stanza--good or go bad!Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I'm all for bloody, bad, tragic because I feel it's more real!.
Nice start BTWWww@QuestionHome@Com
It sounds more like a risque poem than gore - I'd go bad, because the mood is too set to make it a happy ending!. If you make it a happy ending, though, you'd have to make it humorous, or else it won't fit!. Like I said, gore wouldn't fit either - it would kind of go against the grain of the poem, especially because of its being "bloodless!." With all that said, either use dark humor or continue with its initial edginess!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I don't "do" that form, so I can't help ya!.!.!.!.but GO FOR IT which ever direction you take! You'll know!
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I would finalize it with an unexpected twist!.
that is my 2 cents worth!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
i am with breeze a unexpected twist!.!.!.a good one or funnyWww@QuestionHome@Com
YOU the author don't have to do the deciding!. Just write!. Whatever makes the most sense will be the result!.
At least that's what happens to me quite a bit !. !. !.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Twist can sometimes become cliche, so be careful!. That's my only suggestion!. Try writing both and choose which you think fits better!.Www@QuestionHome@Com