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Question: For people who know poetry!. I write a lot but my stuff needs work!.!.!.!?
I also need a name for this poem so throw out any ideas :)

My eyes are shut
I’m sitting here wishing
Can’t I just undo time
For once, I need this

You’re the air I breathe
You’re everything I need
And now I’m suffocating

You said you’d always be my side
And I’d be your bride
But I was kidding myself

My desires consumed me
You couldn’t understand my emotions
And your confusion killed your passion

So you just walked away
You didn’t say a d*** word
You just left me

So here I stand
And I’m pleading now
Give me a chance

If I have to beg on my knees
I will in a heartbeat
You made my world a better place

The way you used to make me smile
I could forget the pain for a little while
And you told me I was beautiful

But was that another lie
I really need to know
Because sadly, I loved you so

So goodbye my almost lover
I bid thee farewell
I’ll do my best to go on

If I could have my broken heart back
It would mean the world to me
Because I have to put it back together…or at least try!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Title: Here I Stand (or) Standing Here

I think this poem is good!. It expresses your thoughts and emotions!.
Your poem made me feel as i was where you were, and going though
everything that you were going through!. I love the different types of
poetry you use here, not just the simple rhyming kind!. overall this poem was great, using good feeling and a good word choice! good job!Www@QuestionHome@Com

this is beautiful
hope it wasn't based on a real experience
i wouldn't say 'You didn’t say a d*** word'
take out the 'd***' it takes away from the poem
other than that it's lovelyWww@QuestionHome@Com