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Question: So, I had this crazy urge to write a poem, I've never written a poem before >_<!?
Yea so I woke up this morning with never ending thoughts and I had to write them down
And they turned into a poem O_o
First poem I've ever written, tell me if you like it or hate it, ok!?

:D


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"Look Outside"
Jan 16 2009: 1:13 am

Grab my chucks
Grab my coat
Rush to the window

Quietly down the fire escape
Climb a ladder
Hop a fence
Cold, flushed, smiling faces
My real family

8th to C street
Broadway to Harbor
Let's watch the waves
Reflecting lights
Sparkling lights

No stress, no drama
No grades, no school
No parents, no worries
Just us

Our noses are cold
We breath clouds
Let's huddle in a circle
Sharing warmth
Like penguins

The stores are closed
The bars are open
But we're too cool
To get wasted and high

Let's get high on life

Our giggles echo off the skyscrapers
Five on the verge of seventeen
Haunt the streets with laughter
The cement island is our dancefloor
And our tongues are the DJ's

Shooting star
Holding pinkies
Hoping this would never end
Wishing we'd never grow older

God, We pray
Please press pause on your remote
We don't want time
We want thisWww@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
This was amazing for a first poem!.
I'm not going to tell you to keep writing!. Or keep trying!.

This is true poetry!. When you get the creative feeling, that's when you write!.
Never ever TRY to write a poem!.

Cheers!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

WOW this is out standing!. it has such great creativity!. for a first time poem no for a poem overall this is great!. it just plain and simple great!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

i think it was really god but it is really long but the first part was really good i really liked it so yeah if u never did it before and u like it and u thuink u r good keep writiing poetryWww@QuestionHome@Com

You know, especially considering this is your first poem, it's really good!. I love it!. =DWww@QuestionHome@Com

I really liked this!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I really like it!. It actually has meaning and sounds real!. Great job!Www@QuestionHome@Com

coolWww@QuestionHome@Com