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Question: Comments on this poem about the way i feel at the moment about leaving school!?
Growing up

In my silent tumult of ideas,
that weather away in my head!.
Shall I stay stowed away in here!?
Or will that call my name to be dead!?

If outspoken, I shall be frowned upon!?
Asking if sanity is just a matter of years!.
Feeling regret for those I’ve clowned upon!.
Happy I’ve never wished to be dead!.

Wondering if all is I, is real!?
Through it all, my wit is my devastation!.
Is this what I’m meant to feel!?
Cant help feeling my home is my education!.

Why do you misunderstand me!?
Why do I want to be misunderstood!?
Never liked those who can’t stand me!.
Starting to appreciate those who could!.

I wonder is my innocence gone!?
Should I mourn it, or see it as a sign!?
That the battle may finally be won,
but did my childish ideals stand the time!?

I’m too scared to open these doors,
I want to stay in my métier with you!.
And I’ve climbed fifteen of these floors!.
Exhausted, wish I had climbed a few more with you!.

The sun will set over this chapter
Without bad words to say of any other
makes it harder, lucky I’m an actor
But these walls still feel like no other

Becoming the person I want to be
Being a pleasantry, a relief to those I love
Right now that’s every one around me
Is there future for me in sky’s above

Only on you do I want to depend!.
Have these five years been enough!?
I feel no naivety left to spend!?
Jesus!. I’m growing up!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I think it conveys very well some of the feelings that you are having!.

It even almost scans and ryhmes well!.

Well done all round!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like what it says - but I think - since it's about leaving a structured institution it would be better suited as either prose or another structure which doesn't require a rhyme scheme!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

^^^I agree

But it doesn't convey all of your feelings does it!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

I liked itWww@QuestionHome@Com