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Question: Poem: Is this good!? Yes, no!.!.!.!?
I wrote this a year ago, and I was just looking over my old word documents!. What do you think!?
The Devil Has Spoken

Life is not
All fun and games!.
Once you learn
You’ll feel the same!.

A hidden truth
Masked by lies
Smoldering ash
And fireflies!.

The place we’re
All condemned to
Is burnt and bent
And broken!.

You have no choice
In where you go!.
Shut up,
The devil’s spoken!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
yah thats really good! have you written any other poems!!!? i like how the poem fits together it sounds nice i like the 2nd paragraph! GREAT JOB! KEEP WRITTING!!! :DWww@QuestionHome@Com

bit emo but i like it
especially the last line
"shut up,
the devil's spoken"
It's sort of an abrupt ending and totally gives the feel of the whole poem!.
If i would rate it out of 10, definitely a 9!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

i see where ur headin to
but this poem cant really be taken seriously
maybe twisting it so the reader can think about it would be better!.
the words u chose just kinda put it out there before the reader even have time to think about it!.

i find it okay!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

thats good! you could turn it into a song cuz it actually rymes!. mine never ryme!.but i will admit they are pretty damn goodWww@QuestionHome@Com

wooo!.!.it's nice! i love it!.!.!.but can i leave a comment!? may be you should give focus on rhymes for us to like it more!.!.!.but it's great!.!.really!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

it's beautiful, it makes me cry every time I read it, you should get Nobel prize!.


ok, now give me my 10 pts!. for best answer!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I love it but be careful someone might take your poem over the internet and take credit for it!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I had trouble in the 2nd and 3rd vs!. To wordy I think or something I may have missed!. Overall I'd say it shows good simple rhythm with symmetrical expression!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Good job! I like it!.

But i might want to change:

Smoldering ash
And fireflies!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

The Devil has spoken,
You satan worshiper,
Get Jesus in ur life!Www@QuestionHome@Com

its kinda freaks me out, all this devil talk,but maybe that becuse i'm only 14!.!.!?
It's really good though i think!.
It has alot of meaningWww@QuestionHome@Com

Very nice!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

wow great poemWww@QuestionHome@Com

yesWww@QuestionHome@Com

kewl!Www@QuestionHome@Com

i read it in a dramatic voice and my bro liked itWww@QuestionHome@Com

i really like it its better than i could ever doWww@QuestionHome@Com

I liked it!Www@QuestionHome@Com

thats my new rapWww@QuestionHome@Com