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Question: Ghazal hmmm!.!. Poetry!. Middle East origins!. What say ye!?
In the true Ghazal, the last word/s of both lines of the first couplet must be the same
Lasciviously, brazen stars shimmer
Surrounding the moon they linger, shimmer
Great clouds of vaporous dexterity
Drift round us above inversely shimmer
As limbs now grounded intertwine subtly
Words unformed, surround, succinctly shimmer
On grassy hilltop, abandoned pleasures
Cavort in feral bliss as they shimmer
Feathered owl salutes the evening weather
Nuances hold counsel; gently shimmer
All nature lathes her blush upon couplets
Nocturnal dance expands couplets shimmer
Figures on the hillside dancing doublets
sight to glimpse; nocturnal dance and shimmer
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You have written a lovely ghazal and have, in doing so, reminded me of a young man (really a boy of 16, but a highly mature and intelligent one) who contributed poetry here last summer!. I mentored him as he learned to write poetry, and he was Persian!. One day, he wrote a ghazal that was just stunning!. I am filled with an awful sadness when I think that such a wonderful young poet no longer contributes here!. I miss him!.!.!. your poem, and the choice to put it in ghazal couplets, are for me a bittersweet gift!. I thank you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
A ghazel indeed repeats the last word of the second line in each stanza, but only as a couplet so the rhyme scheme is xA xA xB xB, the entire poem need not have a refrain throughout !.!.!. although you hint at love, a Ghazel traditionally speaks out loudly about either wine, or women !.!.!. remember Arabic women aren't allowed to speak openly, which in my eyes is Bull$hit !.!.!. so go ahead and break their traditions with all the flair you can muster !.!.!. another great write!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I can't help but notice that you go for forms that have a lot of repetition!.
I find those very difficult because it's hard to keep up a repetition
and have it NOT sound like your using words for the sake of repetition,
but this one isn't all that bad (even with all the repetition)!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
To me it serves to reinforce the essential word!.
Overall is sensual and serves to make me
want to get nekkid and do the Meadow dance !.!.!.!.
!.!.!.!. & since is 13 degrees outside I'll turn into the meadows
newest statue!.
Please Keep the Pigeons off me please!Www@QuestionHome@Com
wow ms!. eyes,, me know what a ghazal is,, but this is high above my head!. me can say one thing,, certainly felt the flow as you breathe words into my ears,, me felt relaxed!.
good write,, ms!. eyes!. thank you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
this is the worst poem that i have read in my entire life!.you have just ruined art fo writing ghazals by your below par writing!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
yip eeeh i caught on lol very good Nancy!.!.!.good nightWww@QuestionHome@Com