My Happy Place
Across the river, beyond bare land!.
I see a mountain, so grand!.
I watch it stir along the currents of air!.
A song sang by mocking birds from here and there!.
The skylight is lively, like feathers and leaves!.
Assorted colors of kinds, fluffy pillows, during eve!.
The weather is so pure, and serene,
I’m snuggled tight with the blades of green!.
I watch the stream flow, it’s being, so free
Just like a never-ending, falling ribbon, it seems to be!.
I see the cotton buds, dance with the sky,
Complimenting the flowers that standby!.
The giant star, hiding beyond the horizon,
Miraculous colors, tis’ brought by my sun!.
The moon pops out and shines in the night,
The stars close behind, their sparkle is slight!.
The sweet breeze carries a scent,
A fragrance of sycamore tree’s, makes me content!.
~Lou Belle~
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