How is my poetry,would you say in motion or at the side of the track ?Be honest.

Question: How is my poetry,would you say in motion or at the side of the track !?Be honest!.!?

Not got a name for it!.
To feast among the elders
a man must prove his worth
Through courage and conviction
May he justify his thirst

But he with shallow heart may find
An all to mighty prey
And nothing will be rewarded
If the problems he cannot slay!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

I'd stay in motion!. You make a good point and it reads well!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It's very well articulated, except the first line, which I really don't think is grammatically correct!.
The last four lines are my favorite!. I feel if you read it out loud to see where it sounds awkward, and then play around with it for a little while, you'd be able to craft it into something awesome!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

im not keen on poetry and like very few poems and i gotta say i dont really like this one!. but like i said, im not big on poetry so what do i know!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

Do You want a Frank answer !? It is Very Very good !. CongratulationsWww@QuestionHome@Com