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Question: Do you like my poem!?!?please answer!.!.!.!?
ok so I really like poetry but this is the first one I've wrote!.!.!.
English is my second language I only started studying it two years ago!.!.!.what do you think!?!?

Set Free

I always knew that this life is not for me
I have to be set free
In every movement I make
I feel my creation was a mistake

probably I should be a bird or a tree
something that's just so free
something that can't possibly feel this much pain
and the anguish that no one can ever explain

Some say it will to be alright
and you're going to find you magical knight
but I don't know if I can wait for it anymore
or if it's even worth waiting for

This pain is just too real
That I can't even feel
It blocks every memory, every dream
It goes beyond the extreme

I always knew that this life is not for me
I have to be set freeWww@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
i really like it!. its great and i think youre made to write poetry!. wat do you think of mine!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

This is good for a 1st poem, your rhyme scheme is fine!.
The problem I have with it is it reads like a suicide note!.
If you are really depressed and/or thinking of it!.!.!.don't!
See a doctor or someone who can help!.Www@QuestionHome@Com