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Question: Can you please take a look at my poem!?
Why does it always happen to me!?
Falling for those
Who don’t even know me!.
Wasting my time
Hopelessly dreaming
Of what could be,
But not taking
The time to express
The way you make me feel
Or how I really do
Whole heartedly love you,
But you don’t know who I am
And I,
I am to shy to tell you myself!.
Where is this imagination
That I believe in so much
Of my soul mate
The one
The right one for me…
I believe its in you
But if I only knew
I should take the time
To talk to you
To find out who you really are
But for right now
I’m stuck
Stuck to love from afar!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Natalie's right stanza's would be nice, and maybe a little re wording on some words, but otherwise, it's really good, and easy to relate to!. Good job!!! :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

it could be really good but you need to organise it into stanzas and not keep breaking the line to force it to rhyme but i like rhyming so keep that or use assonance instead

but stanzas maaaan stanzasWww@QuestionHome@Com