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Question: A true story nine years ago!.!.!.I am a jerk!.!?
A soft muddy landing we had after jumping
From the plane!. I had only learned the name
Of the land of our mission hours before!.
"Where is that!? and why do we have bullets!?"
I asked my brother of the battlefield!. Met with a
Shrug I soon occupied my mind with thoughts
Of home!. We assembled and headed to a village
In this strange land named Kosovo, or Kosova to
The local Muslims!. We halted!. Standing I was
Not bothered by the cold of the land!.
A girl child approached cautiously with a smile that
Was glowing and trusting!.
My instincts told me she was no threat!.
My mind was no machine, as was the metal in my
Hands!. I detected no threat!. She approached and
Spoke a language I had never heard, nor even close!.
As it was snowing, she reached her hand to me
(I thought a sign of good gesture, maybe to shake hands)!.
The snow had accumulated on me and my equipment!.
Her hand cautiously touched my machine of certain
Death, and wiped the soft snow from the barrel!.
She continued her work and soon moved to clear the
Snow from my nomex gloved hands;
The hand that held the tool of death, gripping with
Sureness and readiness, that tool of death; that cold
Metal death!.
She looked me in the eye and smiled!. A faux smile
I returned as the cold winds were blowing!. Even
Without children I felt an instict of fatherhood which
Confused me!. My fake smile turned real, and I liked her!.
I allowed her to continue her work as she had my trust
And some type of friendship only eyes could explain!.
Yes, I trusted her, and we laughed together at something
I will never know!. I checked her voluntary progress of the
Clearing of snow from my weapon and gloves when my
Smile turned to dread!. My fatherly smile was now turned
To pain of the heart!. Her smile remained as she continued
Her labor!. My eyes moved to those tiny working hands;
To those small gloveless hands that were swollen and red!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I still read this with the same fascination I did the first time you posted it!.
A child is so innocent in the scheme of things and it takes ones breath away sometimes when you realize how they tug at your heartstrings,
No I do not think you are a jerk!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

What happened next!? Writing a poem that has no end!? You can't start a story and not finish! I expected something a bit more dramatic!. considering the expectant atmosphere that was created by the descriptions!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

i don't understad!?
how would you be a jerk if you were nice to that little girl!?
take her back!?
she seemed to die soon!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I'm speechless!. I am a veteran also!. I remember the eyes of many!. Their words or motives, were not always clear!. The eyes always were!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

HOLY $HIT BATMAN!!!!!! Sounds like you were molesting her, you keep talking about her touching your tool!. And yes, you are a jerk!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

no, beautifully writtenWww@QuestionHome@Com

I didn't even read it lmao
xoxoxo laurenWww@QuestionHome@Com

you're not a jerk!.
you hadn't noticed she didn't have any gloves on!.
it's ok =]Www@QuestionHome@Com

Jerk!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

What happened after that keep goinWww@QuestionHome@Com

Fat kid!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Right!.!.!.
you are a jerk!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

uhhh so she felt your gun!?!?!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

Yawn!.
You're a jerk for making me read that!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

jerk u made me read all that n there was no reason!
wat a waste of my time!Www@QuestionHome@Com

what a jerkWww@QuestionHome@Com

Why would you think you were a jerk!? You received the love of a young girl, and returned it!. Yes, you were there to kill her family, but it was to protect her!. Sure, she may have died because of what you had to do, but it was because you were protecting her, and the countless other little girls across the whole of our tiny world!.

You were not a jerk, you were human!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

What do you mean are you a jerk!? I don't understand!. It makes a great story though, I do want to read on!. I think I might be missing something, but it sounds like your being nice and fatherly to this child!. If you could add more detail!.!.!. !?Www@QuestionHome@Com

Interesting story!.

I have a few
military buddies (airborne too)
who have spoken of
similar experiences
in Iraq & Afghanistan!.Www@QuestionHome@Com