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Position:Home>Poetry> Would this poem be better presented without caps and punctuation?Question: Would this poem be better presented without caps and punctuation!? Step into puddle,
water ripples in response!. A gentle effect, but restores to before!. Yet, if frozen, its surface cracks!. Splintering rays weaken and destroy!. A heart frozen with unforgiveness reacts the same!. Take precautionary measure, thaw out your heart!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: I'm partial to : Step into puddle water ripples in response - a gentle effect, but restores to before!. Yet if frozen, its surface cracks, splintering rays weaken and destroy!.!.!. A heart - frozen with unforgiveness reacts the same!. Take measure, thaw your heart!.Www@QuestionHome@Com The argument is whether or not to add definition, which takes away from the vulnerability of the second poem!. I am no expert on what poetic device is best, but I prefer to see the openness and wilfull imperfection of the second version!. It says, to me, "I am here and saying something powerful and I am not saying it perfectly but my words are beautiful and I have taken my own advice by showing you the cracks in my surface!." The other simply reads textbook in comparison!. Even though the words are the same!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Thankfully punctuation does not destroy or affect the "voice" of the poem, but it does distract the "corrective mind" from enjoying a relaxing read!. In the 2nd version my CM is not so intent on "obeying" a comma or a period!.!.!.instead I let natural flow of viewing take place!. However it may take more than one viewing to get the rhythm right in the 2nd version, because there are no "guides" in place!.Www@QuestionHome@Com A poem without punctuation makes me breathless!. I want to read it all in one breath!. I prefer punctuation because it tells me what the poet wants to emphasize, where s/he wants me to halt for a second and think!. I like it both ways, but for me, I like it better punctuated!. I'm studying poetry in my college course and we have discussed the same question!. It's about 50-50 in the class!.Www@QuestionHome@Com I agree with Neon, but no using punctuation, to me, makes the reader go through the poem a bit more carefully to be sure nothing was missed!. And I like this poem, both ways!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Do I really need to answer this!? I'll just use two line as an example: Yet, if frozen, its surface cracks!. compared to yet if frozen its surface cracks How would YOU say it!?Www@QuestionHome@Com Can I go with door number 3!? :-) mm!.!.puncuation in my opinion!. The poem content is awesome!Www@QuestionHome@Com Punctuation is used to make the reader pause when you want!. That is your call!. Poem I like!.Www@QuestionHome@Com I am a simple man and like simple answers, so in a word, NO!. Caps and punctuation make it work,Www@QuestionHome@Com I think so, yes!. Beautiful, btw!.Www@QuestionHome@Com I like it both ways it is a nice puddle poem!.!. I think the Punctuations make it stand out more!.!. or my eyes are really going spazzzzzzzzzzz!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com for this particular verse, without is best--it flows better!. just my opinion!.Www@QuestionHome@Com I got the point of the poem equally both ways!Www@QuestionHome@Com no i think it's fine as is and it is a very beautiful poem!Www@QuestionHome@Com It's fine!.!.!.and my heart is thawed too!Www@QuestionHome@Com |