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Question: What do you think about these!?
I wrote some poems!. Leave a comment if you like it or not!. Don't be to harsh please!. thanks! :) Give me advice too please! :) if your not serious about poetry i would rather not hear anything!. btw i am 13!.

Love

I know I love you,
Your the only one I think about,
When I think of you,
I brake down and cry,
I no I will never have you,
It hurts for me,
But not for you,
I love you so much,
I can't bare being away from you!.



True

When I see you,
I want to tell you I love you,
I want to hug you and feel you,
But you will think I am stupid,
Like any other,
I try to hold it back,
But its so hard,
If I yell I love you,
Run into your arms crying one day,
In front of everyone,
You will know,
I truly love you!.

First Time

The first time I saw you,
I liked you,
The second time I saw you,
I loved you,
The third time I saw you,
I fell madly in love,
Your smile,
Is like my air,
Your eyes,
Are like my heart that fell for you,
You make me cry,
Every time because,
I know I wont have you!.

Truth

I told you the truth,
You said ok,
When you could of say,
Oh yay,
You thought I was funny,
When I was serious,
Your laughter emptied my heart,
When my tears filled yours,
I was a fool,
But your still cool!.


Healed

My heart was blank,
With pain and sorrow,
Cuts and bruises,
That always followed,
Later my heart filled with love,
That numbed my pain,
Surrendered my sorrow,
Healed my cuts,
And fond my bruises,
Was the day I met you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Oh, these are very good!. Very good at the emotions played out!. You did a very good job!. You could become a good poet!. (You should enter contest!. Great way to get out there!)Www@QuestionHome@Com