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Question: What do you think of my poem, well at least i think its a poem,!?
what could i do to make it better

What if life wasn't so complicated!?
Maybe it isn't!.
It seems all we do is complicate it!.
Why don't we simplify!?
Why do we cut the puzzle peices in half!?
Why do we create more peices!?
Maybe happiness isn't a possesion, or kidness!.
Maybe it's loving God, and each other;
or maybe it's being loved,
but to be loved don't we have to love!?
When will we love others more then ourselves!?
How will we love others more then ourselves!?
When will we learn to love and not hate!?
Do we need enemies;
or do we want enemies!?
Do we want it for them;
or for us!?
Maybe we're all just selfish!.
What if we we weren't!?
How do we start simplifying this puzzle!?
Is life complicated;
or are we!?
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Wow, that's really profound!.!. It reminds me of when me and my friend were reading these philosophical questions in a religion book and we were thinking very deeply about them and then we would discuss them a bit seriously but with a little humor on the side!.
Her and I could really think about these ones!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Really good but I don't see why you had to add god!. It was really interesting!.Www@QuestionHome@Com