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Question: PLEASE CRITIQUE MY POETRY !?
LOVTHE

I sit here as the white brook flows
and stare into the brilliant ski
Enveloped by the clarity, and baffled so am I
Such a beauty, might inspire, is exhausting me
A curious misconception seems to never set me free
I know not what I see in the', I know how I see through
A lover's gaze, I feel you, with eyes of skies of blue,
And fear not my desire, only fear desires croon
As gentle as the prickly pear, as distant as the moon
A lover loathes thy mortal heart
While mortal heart I must contain
A darkness I have not forgot
Until you may return again

Black and White

Mystic Martyrs breathe within
The holy light, and burning sin,
Through black and white
Through night and day
A worldly wonder wax and wane,
And what is blinding that is true
What holds us back from what they knew!?
The great philosophers of time
Holy ghosts and gods of rhyme,
Nirvana we must all attain,
Before the plague infects the brain

GF

I tried so hard to fight it,
knowing well how hard I'd fall,
no matter what I told myself,
just had to give my all;
easily more beautiful, than anything I've seen,
you are a better person,
than I could ever dream to be,
I have given, you my heart,
despite the nearing pain,
and of the past, not soon forgotten,
I know the future holds the same,
so take my heart, and when you go,
don't even give it back,
for when you hand it back to me,
It will not be intact,
I don't think that you realize,
or even have a clue; what your truly mean to me,
or how much I love you!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Alright, all i am in need to say is : THANK-YOU!

you have no idea how many horrible, uncreative, unoriginal poems are posted on here!. I'd like to thank you for not posting on of them!

thank-you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

i loved the first two, thought they were ingenius!. gentle as a prickly pear, that's beautiful!.

the last one you really crapped up though!. i mean seriously, were you tipsy!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

really good!.
i like the GF one the best!.
Men need to be more like you!.

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