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Question: What do you think about this little diddy!?
as laughter cracks my sides
tears break my eyes
as my life is shattered by lies
like the sun i will rise
no matter how many tries
is it really worth the prize!?Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
You should use some different words to express laughter and tears; cracks and break are not the right ones to use!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

i love it!.!.!. you are good with wordsWww@QuestionHome@Com