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Question: Do you like my poem/ very complex!?
It's very complexI suppose at the end, but if you can understand the meaning I think it is pretty good :O :P

It's called never was



The paitence,
the paitence slowly flows
away and near
near and away!.

Each breathe that was drawn
is later subtracted!.
Each bird that once sang is now
silent left with no actions!.

Why listen to what isn't
there, to what was never there
and only thought that
it might be there!.

Each spec of something that can
possibly mean anything is
now somehow nothing
in the trail of the light that was
traced so to not be forgotten!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Very well written, great imagery, and very well thought out!

All around Amazing!

good job, keep writing!


CP


btw
could u check out my poetry and lend me your thoughts!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

u should make a longer version so that u could make a song outta it also!. i mean thats all songs are to begin with are poems!. and its an amazing poemWww@QuestionHome@Com

woah-that would be a sick song! =P :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

It was an interesting poem!. I didn't think it was completely complex!. It did feel as if a few verse were complex!. But I did feel a presence of emotion with imagery!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

its ok !. !. depressing !. !. Www@QuestionHome@Com

yeah!

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I think it's very cool, makes people think!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

DAMNWww@QuestionHome@Com

it's niceWww@QuestionHome@Com