Do you like this poemi wrote?

Question: Do you like this poemi wrote!?

I’m not supposed to love you
I’m not supposed to feel in such a way
I wish that I could hold you
Oh I wish that you would stay

But I’m not what you are looking for
And how I wish that I could change
Now every time I see you
My heart is filled with pain

Overtime I hoped this feeling
would weaken everyday
But its only I that weaken
I wish this love would fade away
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

awww i loved it gosh i just wanna write it down and say i made this poem but that would be stealing it from u!.!.!.!. keep up the good work i really like it and dont worry i didnt copy it down!.!.or did i!.!.!.!.lol jkWww@QuestionHome@Com

Hmm, sorry to sound harsh, this be better suited for a diary or something, but online you now lets people see and sigh!. It's nothing new, you navel-gaze horribly, never even letting us experience emotion of you!. Pushing readers out of picture and telling us everything, with saccharine cliches and begging eyes!. Look, could people at least try avoid such tired cliches, is it too much to ask!? Firstly you begin rather dully, so what! I don't care how ya feel, ya never let us experience!.

A good rule of thumb for you is too imagine readers not interested in the poem, that you need to immediately capture them!.

Love is a strong emotion, so loss, how is it even possible for people not to come up with anything new!?

Okay now for good, this is sweet, but *sighs* you could do so much better probably, don't write a poem only to be sweet, write to fill others with emotion if you're going to post it online!. I may have been harsh, but it helped make me better, just try and show don't tell!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Quite nice!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

:O
You have a talent :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

very cuteWww@QuestionHome@Com