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Question: Can you please tell me what you think of my poem!?
Far beyond the hatred,
Looking past the rage,
Holding in what you cant say,
Turning past this unmarked page,
Tuning in to darkness,
The source of all his pain,
Admitting what you’ve always wanted,
Knowing there’s so much to gain,
Silence setting in for anger,
Thoughts of violent blows,
Unleash this beast of fury,
In a world that nobody knows,
Wishing you could share this hate,
Knowing that it kills,
Pretending that its all a lie,
Until one day the secrets spill,
They’ve put you in a cage,
Controlling your every move,
But thoughts still play inside your head,
Of what their afraid to lose,
They can’t control you deep within,
Your thoughts becoming sicker every day,
What they see is what they get,
Unless of course they push you the wrong way,
Then suddenly like an illusion,
This person they created is dead,
And these bitter thoughts of revenge,
Become more than just thoughts in your head,
That one day came when you showed them all,
Just like you’d always dreamed,
Now suddenly those little people,
Weren’t as big as they seemed!.



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Wonderful poem i love youWww@QuestionHome@Com

it was well written and i liked the ryhme scheme , but it could have used a little bit of symbolism!. it was good!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Absolutely beautiful! Well done! :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

"Unleash this beast of fury"!Www@QuestionHome@Com

goodWww@QuestionHome@Com

mhmmm! That was clever :]] really!.!. thats basically all i could think of!.!. no other words for it!.!.!. :]]Www@QuestionHome@Com