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Question: Did i write a good poem!.!.!.!?
She rises up from restless sleep
To greet another day
She wonders if he thought of her
As he started on his way
The first thing on her mind was him
And her love swells like a tide
She always starts her morning ouut
Wishing he were at her side

She looks up with saddened eyes
To catch a lonely stare
The lost girl in the mirror sighs
And brushes back her hair
For just a brief few moments
She smiles a secret smile
Her finger reaches out to trace
I love you, on the tile

Memories so bitter sweet
Go rushing through her head
Thoughts of how he held her close
As they shared the same soft bed
Music, wine, and candlelight
Making love at break of day
Then the sadness of A brave goodbye
As she slowly walked away

She knew when it all started
Some days would feel this blue
Real love is worth the price you pay
And she knows this one is true
So she pulls herself together
As she whispers out his name
Not knowing many miles away
He's whispering the same!. Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Yes, I love it! Wish i could write this well!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

To be honest you lost me on the begining!. I've read so many poems in here talking about how someone wakes up in the morning and how they end up with love on their side!. It was a little dry on the imagery, but its a nice attempt!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

She is alone,now, in her room, big and empty
Just seems yesterday when love dwelt a plenty
Thinking of him, she wishes he could be here
With every passing moment in mind he is nearWww@QuestionHome@Com

You get an A++!. This is very well written!. Www@QuestionHome@Com