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for my granny who died of cancer

Love You Forever Granny
By Stevi

You were ill for a very long time
I hated what happened to you like it was some sort of crime
I can never forget the love that you gave
Everytime I seen you weak, I wanted to be brave
I miss you, everyday that goes by
The more I think I will never see you again the more i want to cry
Love you forever, Miss you for a life time

oOo ~ oOo

The day you left me, my heart broke
Everytime I picture your smile I coke
Never have I experience so much pain
I laugh at all the memories we had together
I miss cuddling in to you when I feel sad
Always remember the rows you gave me for being bad
Love you forever, Miss you for a life time

oOo ~ oOo

The most I miss is the Christmas’s we spent
Waiting for Santa, you would say I roasted the turkey I’d ask what you meant
Me and Jamie staying up at all hours of the morning
You and Grandad telling us to get back to bed
We would ask if Santa had been fed
Love you forever, Miss you for a life time

oOo ~ oOo

Christmas morning we’d get up at the crack of dawn
Wasn’t allowed in the living room until you had you cuppie
Every year for Christmas I asked for a puppy
Tearing at the presents one by one
Playing with the present looking like we had won
Miss seeing your face when we opened them
Miss being at yours on Christmas dinner every year
Everyday I am with out you all I feel is fear
Love you forever, Miss you for a life time


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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
heres a few corrections if you want to put them in:
Everytime I seen you weak = saw you weak
i picture your smile i coke = smile i choke
never have i experience = experience
wasn't allowed in the living room = weren't

apart from that i think it really represents the thoughts of a grandchild really well : ) you've remembered all the special thingsWww@QuestionHome@Com