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Question: Can you judge my poem!?
I'm not a profesional!. But my sister cried, and so did my Mom!. My dad even got teary eyed!. Here it is:
No Time Left
Dad today is your birthday
By the amount of grey hairs on your head
I know your getting old
The time we have together is almost up
I’m growing up, you’re growing old
Soon we will both be growing apart
I will be in college, you could be retired
Soon after that you could be a Grandpa
But let’s not look to the future
Let’s not dwell in the past
Today, right now is important
So let’s spend this time together
Before there is no time left
With Love,
Taylor Baird
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
It's beautiful, and it made me tear up! I write fiction myself!. Keep it up, you have talent! :)Www@QuestionHome@Com
It is not sad!. It is cruel!.
To tell your father he is old and life will end soon is not a very good topic of conversation!. On top of that you say "Let's not look to the future"!.
If there were tears, they were most likely crocodile tears!.
By your writing style, I would guess you are 15 years old!.
Who says you have to grow apart!? You can leave home and remain close!.
I'm crying right now because it is a very poor and heartless 'poem'!?!?!?Www@QuestionHome@Com
that is really cool!
keep writing!Www@QuestionHome@Com
I will give you a 10 its perfect! i loved it i wish i cam up with it!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com