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Question: Am I a decent poet!? Can you relate!?
1st poem:I wrote a year or so ago when me an my current GF were fighting

Spatial Warriors

Mind Submerge, Hatred Unearth!.
Feelings Reverb, Power Drain Urge!.

Mind Unhinge, Frozen Fringe!.
Kinetic Attack, Bring Me Back!.

Vengeance Forsaken, Life Taken!.
Pain Relent, Forgiveness Spent!.

Inner Dwelling, Mind Compelling!.
Sanctuary Seek, Mountains Peak!.

Idle Calm, Inner Bomb!.
Almost Knowing, Senses Flowing!.

Inner Burn, Confront Return!.
Imaginary Reflex, Enemy Perplex!.

Yieldly Tone, I Alone!.

My 2nd Poem is about being earth conscience, I wrote it on earth day 2006 Thank you google for reminding me!.!.

The Cleansing

One and only habitat!.
The one we take and do not give back!.
Until our mountains are charred so boldly black!.

Will we ever love you again!?
Or is this the fate of man!.

I hear the trees cry as their leaves tremble and shake!.
Yesterday was the hurricane,
Tommorrow, dreams of quake!.

How I remembered you in my youth!.
And now your downfall is just a spoof!.
When the childrens children cry,
We will have our proof!.

So what is to become of her pain thats never relenting!?
Is today the day we pay the cleansing!?

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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Cool stuff! I like it :) Your rhymes are sweet!

Read mine!? Thanks!
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I just added this: Wow, you're good dude!.!.!.you have great interpretation skills!. You were right, I am talking about a guy with blue eyes :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

well ur not that bad to be Honest bt ur 1st poem is a lot better than the first, I cant relate bt I like the way yhu express ur self!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

im good also but you seem better than me , great jobWww@QuestionHome@Com