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For school, we have to write a poem!. We have to pretend to be Anne Bradstreet and write about Hester Prynne in The Scarlett Letter, as though we were actually an observer in the story!. We have to use{at least} one use of imagery, one metaphor, one simile, a title, and at least fifteen lines!. So, below is what I came up with!. But before I hand it in, I want to see what people think of it!. It took me a while, and I just want to make sure what I have is!.!.!.decent, at least!.
Here it is:


Sin, Love, and Fate


A child put in this world,
from a most unforgiving sin!.
Like a stopless version of a children's game,
This is a story in which no one can win!.
An "A" is written on her chest,
a symbol for her sin and conflicted heart!.
A lover stands nearby somewhere,
for sin committed was not too far!.
The seasons are a clock,
as leaves and seasons change!.
The child, she grows, inevitably,
Something that cannot be stopped!.
The lover has admitted sin,
one tragic, fateful day!.
Forcing Hester to live her life,
Live it alone, and in her own way!.
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
That's a damm good poem! It's really good!. When I clicked on this question, I was not expecting anything even close to that!.

Personally, I prefer fewer words to say things - that way it faster and hits harder!. What do you think of this suggestion:

A child put in this world
by unforgiven sin,
A stopless version of a a children's game
that no one can win!.
An "A" is written on her chest,
symbol of sin and conflicted heart!.
A lover stands by somewhere near,
for the sin shall never go far from her!. [I didn't understand "was not too far]

The seasons are a clock,
as leaves and seasons change!.
The child she grows, [lose the "inevitably" - it's lame; all kids inevitably grow - duh]
a thing that cannot be stopped!.
Until her lover admitted sin,
on one tragic day [it was in fact "tragic"; i!.e!.containd elements of tragedy, but "fateful"!? not really !.!.!. it anything, the fate of Hester and Pearl was not related at all to Dimmesdale's confession]
And Hester went to live her life,
alone, and in her own way!.

[Suggestion: The image of the letter "A" is well established in your poem!. Since you end your poem with the word "way" which rhymes with "A", perhaps you could add another couplet, repeat the use of "A", and thereby suggest a sense of closure the way the book does; i!.e!. the tombstones marked with the A!?

Like for example:

And she lived until she died,
died beneath the letter "A"]

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It's good!.Dave H suggestion may be seriously considered for inclusion
As that puts more sense in the verse!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

determined!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

its good and could be betterWww@QuestionHome@Com