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Sweet Love Now Became Lemon sour Bitter Bitter Every hour I tried hard I played my cards My luck was blank I missed the track My love is gone I lost the fun I packed my luggage Rode the carriage Looking for love in new land Www@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: I like it!. If you like to write poems and articles, join associatedcontent!.com for free and get published!. for articles, you are getting paid $3-20 USD!. so join!. continue writing and check out my poem to see what I'm talking about: http://www!.associatedcontent!.com/article!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com I found your poem a bit awkward!. Not in a bad way, just awkward!. It seems like you wrote it very fast without putting a lot of emotion and thought into it!. Sometimes our best work is done that way though, so it's not to discourage you!. The idea and story of the poem is good!. Love lost, and on a mission to find love again!. It has a bitterness to it!.!.!.as if someone just broke your heart!. Www@QuestionHome@Com Needs a wee bit of polish but I think you have something good here!. Keep writing!.Www@QuestionHome@Com its good, but i think its too short!. it would be awesome to have a more extended version of it!. Www@QuestionHome@Com I Like ItWww@QuestionHome@Com its good[=Www@QuestionHome@Com |