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Question: Rough poem, thoughts on it!? anyone feel the same way!?
Where am I, who am I
in this mess, this jumbled mess!?
Young or old, hot or cold
as ice as lava as rocks as newborn babies!?
When should I stop running and start walking and
should I ever sit down,
ever never!?
He tells me to grow up,
get real!. Start thinking about

the Future!.

Why should I grow up, get real,
when all I want to do
is run through the grass,
jump in puddles,
ride a bike without a helmet,
hate bedtime,
and love, simply love!?

Why should I want to be a kid
when all I want to do
is grow up,
make money,
fall in love,
start a family,
and have a life
of my own!?

Maybe time should just slow down!.
Everyone should just slow

down!.
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
This poem has a lot of potential!. I like it, but I think the flow could be a bit better!. I liked the second (full) stanza a lot!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

that's so cool i feel the same way ! i wonder who i really am until my friend told me that is such a cool poem!Www@QuestionHome@Com

i like itWww@QuestionHome@Com