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My best friend and I have the same birthday!. And she's one of the only one's i've let see my poetry, and she thinks i should show people!. so as part of her present i wrote a poem about us (i took our experiences and inside jokes and made them symbolic and poetic) and she can put it wherever she wants so it's a big deal that i'm letting people see it!. :P so thoughts please!.

Tea Time With the Twins

Two roses, delicately plucked from the gleaming skies above
rest in the hair of two twins!.
Vines of dreams interweaving our hearts and minds;
everlastingly in bloom!.

Whence trapped in dark, surrounded by murky depths,
to a shimmering waterfalll we stumble;
we will bask in the light of accomplishment!.

In autumn leaves we'll frolic, silhouettes prancing upon ill grass,
we will read tales of the clouds, of a playhouse, a unicorn!.
Stories of our hopes, dreads, and innermost secrets,
we'll share; we'll listen, through the tendrils of the vines!.

No matter how muddy each valley, or how haunted each street,
together we'll harden the mud, cleanse the road,
and be perpetually aware; that without smoke there is no fire!.

The vines guide us back home, to a tea party table, where we'll forever reminisce and remember,
our lives, our hopes, and the day that linked us, predestined 21st of November!.
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