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Question: Im not very good at this!?
what do you think!?!?
i wrote this for my brother over in Iraq!.!.
today is his birthday, and i miss him like crazy!!
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You may say, “A hero is nothing without a cape and name!.”
I say, “Real heroes don’t have time for such games!.”
You may in vision one as the savior of the story!.
I see them in a way that deserves much more glory!.
A hero to you,
is the speaker raging out against the war,
“Terror is gone,
war is not needed anymore!!”
A hero to you,
Is the rapper of the time,
Disrespecting your culture,
in every word and rhyme!.
A hero to me,
Are those we never see,
Whose only visits,
Are those in your dreams!.
A hero to me,
Keeps their head high,
As tears stream down,
From their determined eyes!.
A soldier is a hero,
Whose work is never done,
And still they somehow,
Hand over the sun!.
A soldier is a hero,
Fighting for one and all,
Always pressing on,
Refusing to fall!.
A soldier is a title,
My brother firmly holds,
Over in a far place,
Where war steadily unfolds!.
And so I hope you see,
A true hero never looses touch,
And to my soldier,
i love you so much!!
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
What makes you think that you are 'not very good at this!?!' You brought a tear to the eye of an old veteran!. Poetry is concieved from the heart, and you let yours pour out by putting pen to paper!. That's what it is all about!. You are just as special as your brother, and he will return this to you in kind when he comes home!. Www@QuestionHome@Com
I think you don't give yourself enough credit & I think your brother will be so happy to get it & will share it with all his fellow soldiers!.
Two typos, just to polish it up, envision-instead of in vision, and loses instead of looses, I know that might just be how you typed it here, but I thought I would point them out, not to be critical, just to help out!.
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I love it!! It is so good!! I know exactly where you are coming from my uncle is a marine and everyday is a life of fear not knowing wether your are going to hear from them again!. I truly believe in the heroics of a soldier for they are there defending us endangering their lives!. Your brother is very fortunate to have a loving family supporting him and showing him love!. He love it, i love it anyone would love it! =)
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I think its great =)!. Especially if he is your brother, he is not going to care how it sounds, just that you put in the effort to do it, i would be delighted to recieve something like this!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Amazing poem, you're very talented! Your brother is very lucky to have you as a sister :) Welldone on the great poem, happy birthday to him and a safe return!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
it's really deep, and really good!
you can tell from the poem how you feel and that you want him back really bad!Www@QuestionHome@Com
Your brother will love this because it's from your heart and very meaningful to you!. It isn't bad!. Just one thing, "Looses" should be "loses!."
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Not to shabby!. I would work on your grammar and punctuation, though, otherwise pretty good!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
This is amazing! It will make him cry! It almost made me cry! It is sure to make him proud of himself, and you!Www@QuestionHome@Com
its very good im sure your brother will appreciate and cherish thisWww@QuestionHome@Com
Its good!. Happy Birthday!Www@QuestionHome@Com
5 stars
he will like itWww@QuestionHome@Com
That's amazing!!
You're a great writer, your bro will love it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
It's very good
you are so right about the rapper partWww@QuestionHome@Com
Beautiful!. Your brother is a fortunate man; it is clear that you love him!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
ITS GUDD^^!!!!!!!!!!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com
that is really thoughtful
good jobWww@QuestionHome@Com