Will you comment on "Walnut Grove"?

Question: Will you comment on "Walnut Grove"!?

"Walnut Grove"

Like arthritic hand thrust from the
grave in deep despair,
Gnarled fingers clasped in fist as
grasping for fresh air!.

Knuckles boney leather cracked
bruised and yellowed age,
Ruined bloodless Walnut tree and
midnight set the stage!.

The moon was dressed to paint the town
shadowy delight,
In which hidden depths of fear lurched
blindly through the night!.

Before six bells could strike six more;
I raced heartbeat home,
Ne'er again to walk that darkend
Walnut Grove alone!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

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I see the gnarled finger as the limbs of the walnut tree seemingly reaching and grasping in the moonlight bathed darkness!. A frightened little girl, running for home, fear gripping her very soul!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Over reaching the limits of my license rewrote:

Trees like arthritic hands thrust despairing from
deep graves,
Gnarled fingers clasped in fists of rage,
and others daintily pluck the stars and moon
twixt finger and thumb as grapes for the picking!.
I got the feeling someones in for a licking

Knuckles bony leather cracked of
bruised and yellowed age,
Ruined bloodless Walnut trees and
midnight set their stage!.

The moon was dressed to paint the town with
shadows in delight,
And therein unfathomable depths of fear lurked
swaying menacingly roughly in the night!.

Before six bells could strike six more;
I raced my heartbeat home,
Never again to tread that darkent path through
Walnut Grove alone!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

You have the heartbeat of the poem and the rhyme down almost perfectly!. I find the message confusing: I see an old person (gnarled fingers) racing home!. It confuses the message, an old person is not expected to race anywhere!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

That's a totally!.!.!.like!.!.!.narly and wicked poem!.!.!.!.!.twisted in its own way!. Scared me a lil but now I'm ok!.!.!.I think!.

Sin you write so well!. Leaves the rest of us in the shade!.!.!.of the twisted Walnut tree at midnight!.!.!.!.muahahahaha (insert more evil laughing here ->!.!.!.!.!.!.!.)Www@QuestionHome@Com

Wonderful imagery (I guess I say that every time you post!) I wonder if the first stanza wouldn't work better as a metaphor than a simile (in other words, cut the word "like") It's just a thought; see what you think!.!. Great poem as usual!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like it!.But,,,The first two stanza's sounded as if it would be an elderly person clawing there way back ,,,
You have come a long way in a short period of time!.
I do like it ,,,and it needs a little T L C ,,Thanks for sharingWww@QuestionHome@Com

very well done!.!.!. i like that it has a rhythm and rhyme and has symmetric stances and a richness of vocabulary and the atmosphere it generates is quite vivid!.!.!. but it isn't too "deep" or i failed to see the inner meaning!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I saw the gnarled fingers representing the fear which the voice of the poem was running from!.!.!.!.and your descriptive poem made me want to run, too, Sin, gave me shivers!

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An excellent description of fear, and the terrors of Walnut Grove!. Such an innocuous name for a place where spirits rise!.!.!.chilling!. Thank you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

good choices of descriptive words!.!.!. the picture was vivid and very plain to my eyes!.!.!. I could see it clearly as if I was standing there!.
well done!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Makes me not want to take a walk down walnut st!.,which is two blocks over from Me! Very vivid,wonderfully worded!Www@QuestionHome@Com

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I really saw those old gnarly trees! Great rhyme!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

Great work awesome detail I was able to see a pretty vivid picture through my minds eye!.!.!.Good Stuff!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com