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Question: Why do we share these rough drafts with each other!?
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COLD COALS

There’s no change in you,
no difference I remember,
June through December
the same wind,
the same whether,
You’re so clever,
or so not so,
whichever way you blow!.

There’s no ice on you,
in the frozen frigid weather,
May through November,
the same cold,
the same careful,
You’re too better,
or so not so,
where ever sickles grow!.

What is your temperature,
heart and mind dismembered,
rake and sift the cooling embers,
the same fire,
the same flame,
or so not so,
however will I know!.

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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Actually a sickle is a one hand version of a sythe!.

We share our rough drafts to be told how good we are, so we need not edit them into finished product!.

Seriously, we look for honest critique to hopefully improve what we did!. When we make a mistake, it usually gets missed the second or third time also!. Need fresh eyes to see readily what we blindly miss!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

As always, you verse is top notch!. And like me, you post it here because you would like it seen and read by as many people as possible!. There's nothing wrong with that!.

But might I suggest that 'where ever sickles grow' be changed or edited out!? Sickles can't grow!. It could be somwthing as simple as considering the word 'toll' instead of grow!. Or whatever suits the tone of your verse!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Oh my, I pass!. Let's see what the others say first!.

EDIT: sicklepod noun:

1!. cosmopolitan tropical herb or subshrub with yellow flowers and slender curved pods; a weed; sometimes placed in genus Cassia
2!. North American rock cress having very long curved pods

This poem is not a rough draft!. It is a finished product!. There are no spelling errors in this poem, no misuse of words!. It is a tour de force!. I wish someone would respond to the poem, rather than to the question!. It deserves much more than it is getting!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

How can I grow if I don't show my so and not so-so ya know!? I don't look for praise!. When it comes from those who have previously critiqued the same write, I know I'm getting it right!. So to you (readers) my clumsy attempts I submit!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

*huh*
oh yes the question!.!.
why!?
I have this queer notion that by doing so!.!.!.!. I can gage both positive and negative interpretation, as well as holding a hope in my heart that I will get some constructive criticism along with return witticism!.

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Rearrange the furniture, play at playing house and dub it domestic tranquility!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Sounds comfortable cozy to me!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I stopped in for the fire!.

I'll start chopping some more wood!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

"critique of reason"

It's free
- will,
take my
kindling!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

If we can't ask our friends who can we ask!?

nfd?

Isn't a sickle a blade that cuts grass!? Just wondering!?Www@QuestionHome@Com